Talk:Wikimedia Blog/Drafts/Article Feedback Update

Looks already quite good overall to me, a few points while the editing progresses:

I understand that some screenshots and links will still be added, which are likely to help the reader who is not yet familiar with how AFTv5 looks and works.

"This finding seems consistent with our observation that moderation actions tend to be more negative than positive." - This is the first mention of moderation and therefore needs some context on what moderation actions are and who moderates (for the former, the link is kind of helpful, but describing them more explicitly might be helpful).

"... an average of 4,100 posts per day, on just 10% of the English Wikipedia. At this rate, we estimate about 900,000 posts per month once Article Feedback is deployed to 100% of English Wikipedia in 2013." - just a note that a linear extrapolation would give a higher number (e.g. 4,100 * 10 * 30 = 1,230,000); I guess a less simplistic model was used for this estimate?

"About 98% of this feedback is from anonymous users, who are not currently participating on Wikipedia." - seems there might be a meaning-changing extraneous comma here?

"And about 70% of the readers we surveyed liked this feedback tool." - something like "...liked this feedback tool after using it" might make it clearer that the sample consists of readers who had already decided to use it.

Regards, Tbayer (WMF) (talk) 20:48, 19 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

AP style[edit]

I'm going to make some copy edits based on AP Style. In general, there are a few things like spelling out "%" as "percent" and removing Oxford commas, double spaces, etc. that we do as a convention. Matthew (WMF) (talk) 01:20, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]